Kafkaescence

fend for themselves,I went off for acting. Comma, space. “follow your dreams”, Punctuation goes inside quotation marks. I can’t blame anyone else, though. It’s hard not to. Contradict each oth

Yeah, this doesn't make any sense. Who is the figure? The resident of the household? Some rival thief somehow out on the same quest? Both are unlikely based on the ...

So this was a beautiful little piece of prose. I almost want to call it poetry - I guess it's one of those stories that is right on the borderline. ...

Be careful what you wish for, right? Haha. Sure. Lots to say on this, I guess. I'm not sure whether the aforementioned moral is what's most prominent here, though - ...

There are two tricks to descriptive writing: the imagery itself and the fluency. I don't have much to critique you on as far as the first department. While there were ...

Food was scarce, leaving a constant uncomfortable pain in her stomach. The grammatical link between the first and second clauses is tenuous. Try rewording this. hypothermia Is it winter? I ...

Kind of reminds me of the Big Crush theory, what with your reference to singularity endpoint and everything closing in on the boy. I wonder if this was your basis? ...

Back. Sorry about that. I want to say I have some tangible commentary to offer you but, in all honesty, I don't. This felt more like a mini-me version of ...

Wow. Wow. Okay. Lots to digest here, like last chapter. As always, Twit, your style was charming, intriguing, all that. I'm beginning to get a sense of where this story ...

Ring. Ring. Oh, cliched beginning. Is that really all you can think of? My hand shot out in a flurry of motion, Right, well, guess what: at four in the ...

Don't know why, but I'm in the mood for reviewing poetry at the moment. But what I'm seeing here is not so much poetry as a crunched-down philosophy essay, or ...

Nostalgia, like memories of being five-years-old, and mom turning up the tender lullabies of Van Morrison or Santana while men barbeque; mesquite smoke clinging to their clothes. The fragrances of ...

Right. I think it would be safe to consider this up to serial killer "snuff" (a fitting idiom). It's usually the detective character that is assigned the role of protagonist ...

And PS thought that she was late.... Anyway, this was a great chapter, like everyone else said. The dissection (if it can be called that) process was infinitely vivid, the ...

There is an art to shorter stories like these, just as there is in poetry and novels. Their goal is not as complex as, say, developing a character, or some ...