Juniper

Hi Jon! June here! Like I just mentioned to you, this poem is much better than your previous, although it's a bit wordy in some places. (I'm aware that I ...

Hello Jon! June here! I haven't reviewed you in what seems like ages. :) Because a flame is more than heat, And wax is more than oil. Keeping alive is ...

Hey Misfit! I second Kitty! This is an extremely well improvement from your first attempt. I'm so glad to see that you used the tips thrown out there; you've really ...

Hey there! You have a fabulous username. Jemima Puddle Duck was one of my favorite bedtime stories ever. ;) And she came home to dinner that evening: the personification of ...

Hi there, Penelope! Welcome to YWS! I'm June, and I'm going to critique this for you. ;) As they lay her down In a bed of wildflowers And tickled her ...

Hi, Rasca lover! June here! I believe that this piece has some potential to it, but I don't that you've fulfilled it's purpose yet. When she was sixteen years old ...

Hi KJ! When I am not so tired, I plan to review this, and the other three chapters you have posted. So far, reading over this, I can say that ...

Hi Conrad! This was an excellent finish to the story. It sealed all of the events in nicely, and made your audience pity Naldar for not knowing the full truth. ...

Hi Conrad! June here. :) Another excellently written chapter by you in the same even pacing and wonderful tone. The only thing I have to point out about this is ...

Hey Con! June here! I felt bad reading and enjoying this and not being able to do it. I'll try the best I can to review this. I don't have ...

Hey Poppity! June here! Nitpicks first! =D I leaned in closer. Suddenly, its head spun around and it let out a loud quack right in my face. Do Geese quack? ...

Hey there Shina! June here! :D So! I see somebody has gotten better at description. :P Let's have a stab: A torrent of crimson cascaded down his face with the ...

Hi Incog! I'm lazy :P. It's been a long time since I did this sort of review: Every single night, I would stand in that doorway, fingers ready to flick ...

Hi, Black Rabbit! June here! I really, really like this poem. It's interesting and nicely written, but I do have some [harsh] nitpicks about the repetitive scheme that dances in ...

Hey there, Aquamarine! June here, your reviewer for the moment. I have to agree with Krupp; it is indeed a rarity to find rhyme and rhythm executed well like this. ...