JosephDean

:) I haven't been online to YWS in *forever*. I've actually decided to stop posting stuff here a long while ago. However! I cannot resist the New Private Message alerts ...

Hey, Astrid! Okay so I hadn't logged into YWS in almost a year, but then I got a notification of your message and figured I had to come back at ...

*claps* Oh this was great. At first I was thinking, "Wow this is kinda long," but oh I'm glad I read all of it. :D I can be somewhat of ...

Pay attention to your capitalisation and apostrophe usage. Don't regret posting it; it served a purpose - you received advice for future posts. I understand the "deeper meaning" that you ...

Wow, it's pretty good. Nice change of style that a lot of the other fifteen-year-old boys around here use (i.e. profanity every three words). The only grammatical/punctuational thing I would ...

Okay, I'm not going to go through a nitpick review because that'd take too long :P As far as content goes, I stand by what I said on Clad in ...

I'm not really that well-versed in critiquing poetry, but I have to say this was great. I liked how the first stanza keeps the five syllable count all the way ...

A few nitpicks first: It’s February 1993 , and I’m trying to write a poem on the subway when an old, bearded homeless man parks himself on the seat next ...

As always, most of the below is just commas, lmao. Don't worry too much. This story is great :) “You taste wonderful – your blood is richer than the blood ...

Lol, I'm so tired of nitpicking today; someone else can tackle the few commas. But I will just point out a few things still in my ratty old t-shirt, T-shirt, ...

*before reading* Wait, so the Chapter Three that I just reviewed... so you have a different Revised version up where you edited out the kiss then? If so, let me ...

I was amazed by how naked I felt, though I was wearing more layers today than usual, deciding to go on the white singlet to pull down over my skirt ...

Lol, I get what you said about people thinking it was basically a Twilight fanfic. It does resemble it in ... well just about every way :P Then again, it's ...

I'm physically unable to tell a short story as well. First, a few nitpicks that I don't think have been already pointed out: “We do? Aw, I hate that horrid ...

Gah, I was working on my review for this, but the idiots at my house turned off our router box, eliminating my Internet access. So people have beaten me to ...