JohnLocke1

I decided to divide it into two parts, so thanks again for your input, my friend.

Thank you, my friend!

Thank you so much for reading this. I wasn't sure anyone would try because of the length, but thank you, my friend.

Thank you so much for reading my work. It means the world, my friend.

Thank you for your review. I have taken everything that you have told me and applied it to my revising process. I may have more questions because I plan to ...

I'm sorry for not saying this sooner, but thank you for your review. It has helped me so much with my revisions.

Sorry that I am just now seeing this question! "He glanced at me, an imperceptible helpless glance; the smile, which had never really been there in the first place, was ...

I realize it was the end of the chapter, but I felt as though it ended rather strangely. I would have liked to hear more from your characters.

Thank you so much!

Thank you for the review! I posted this on another website and they absolutely hated my story, so I'm glad you enjoyed it!

You told them everything about Ralkin and Lyle in the first few paragraphs. Since he's on a walk, why not describe the area and himself as he walks and thinks ...

No problem. Message me when you write more. I can't wait!

I have no idea why that was submitted twice. Weird.

Since you said to be thorough, I was very detailed. First, Grammar. "...we were walking through the park when the wind brew..." Brew? Did you perhaps mean brewed or blew? ...