Johanna

Ha ha. the whole time I thought it was a dude. You did a good job of adding little events that make it more and more interesting. It is very ...

You did a good job of establishing mood since the first paragraph. It's a good size prologue, as long as it gives the information you want it to. I hope ...

I like the way you wrote this story. One part kind of interrupting another. It's alittle confusing at first but it is also different. I also liked how you described ...