Joeducktape

I do agree with Phorcys about past tense. It's much easier to write, read, and understand. I tend to skip stories when I see present tense used. However, I think ...

Okay... THE GOOD STUFF: You were very detailed! Good work! I also enjoyed the fact that you showed me the relationship between Siera and Zeke well. They seem like you ...

I have to say, the description was the first thing that caught my attention. I love it when a writer makes the setting real to me. And I must say, ...

Lovely! It's awesome! It really held my interest. I have a desire to know more about the boy and the babies and the almost unspeakable crime! I see no obvious ...

I personally am a fan of Harry Potter. They really are great books, and I've grown with the books, so I can appreciate how the simple plot and happy characters ...

Okay, there sould be commas before the "buts" and more periods. Otherwise you have a junked up run-on sentence. Ex: I tried to slice through the evil thing, but it ...

This is a good start, but very short. We didn't see very much of a story here. Rosin tromped through the wet, fallen leaves of the Scottish fall. This may ...

Yes, I agree. Sometimes its fun to learn about characters as you go, otherwise it seems as though you don't care enough. The scenarios will come where you can add ...