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Jabber! *celebratory Part 2 dance* Nice. This was also very creepy, although I'm hoping the next part has a little variation, since this piece had basically the same set-up. Didn't ...

Yay, Alice! This was very nice. Although, I only wish I could hear it. :wink: Because you gave it your best go Even though it doesn’t show I think that ...

Hey, nickelodeon! Long time no see. This was an excellent start, albeit a short one. The imagery you used to describe the storm was great. Very few things to critique ...

Hey, Bethany, and welcome to YWS. Hope you like it here. So, this was an interesting piece. Foreign exchange student, eh? That opens up a lot of opportunities for fun ...

Hola, Jabber! I really liked this. It had a creepy-cool, ominous feeling. Also, I could picture everything quite clearly. It was like I was seeing it through the eyes of ...

Hey, Insomnia! Very cool, gruesome piece, and a nice change from some of the other stuff I've been reading lately. [quote="Insomnia]“Big day again?” “What do you think?” he asked, massaging ...

Interesting second chapter, Sydstix! Now we get to see a little conflict begin. :) OVERALL As far as content goes, this had a lot more "action" than the first chapter, ...

Hey, Reakeda! This was great. I loved the mystery of it all. Also, this had a nice pace and you avoided infodumping! *applauds* Now, onto my critique. Three simple words, ...

Welcome, NightsDreamer! *does the New Member Welcome Jig* Very nice to meet you! This piece was interesting. The plot sounds intriguing-- all this war mixed with romance and whatnot. Now ...

Hullo, Sydstix! Ah, a historical touch, I see? Wonderful! A few comments: While it feels like you're setting us up for a neat story, that was about all that we ...

Very nice, Sam. I quite enjoyed the description of the woman at the Dairy Queen. I could picture her quite vividly. You painted a wonderful picture. I both pity and ...

Oh Lord, Ari! That was wonderful. Really, well done. Beautiful story, beautifully written. Toward the end I actually started to cry! You were curious, charming, adorable, delightful. In short, complet

Not much constructive criticism or anything, but I really did enjoy this. Very well written, and as Billy said, it made me think. I'll be ready to see some more ...

Ooh, Jiggity! I am very excited to read the next part of this. Very nice, very nice. It kept my interest and flowed quite well. The characters are varied and ...

*claps* Very nice, Sarah! I quite enjoyed this. Your imagery wasn't too sappy. It felt real. It reminded me of guy friends I've had. One thing that bugged me: He ...