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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Relapse

    Pretty good poem! A few notes on the grammar and verse in general: You're words can't touch me Your fist can't budge me I'm finally coming clean. Change "You're" in ...

    Jul 26, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: One Winged

    Hey, Elena! Interesting poem, it reminds me of something I once read by Margaret Atwood. One thing I would do is add more imagery. Try words with many meanings so ...

    Jul 26, 2009


By the sweat of your brow you will eat your food until you return to the ground, since from it you were taken; for dust you are and to dust you will return.
— Genesis 3:19