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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Relapse

    Pretty good poem! A few notes on the grammar and verse in general: You're words can't touch me Your fist can't budge me I'm finally coming clean. Change "You're" in ...

    Jul 26, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: One Winged

    Hey, Elena! Interesting poem, it reminds me of something I once read by Margaret Atwood. One thing I would do is add more imagery. Try words with many meanings so ...

    Jul 26, 2009


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