JimmyTheMighty

I know the context of this - and you know I like it! Well done Bella, I've read it before obviously, but I do like this :D

Nice! Very short, yes, but in a way it adds to the overally effect - in some ways grief can be very simple - I look forward to seeing more ...

Mostly very good but your rythms were off in many places, which is a big no-no in limericks. You have to be careful when picking the rhyme for the beginning ...

This is exquisitly written, very interesting. I don't really have much to add, except to say, carry on with your writing! :)

Thanks for all of the reviews, this is my first piece on yws so its great getting all the feedback.

This an absolutely exquisite piece, beautiful and stirring. Thats all I really have to say. Keep up with the fantastic work, I also loved the poem about the hospital jail ...

You had a change in tense early on in the story that interrupted the flow, and needs to be changed, the rest of the story was good however. I loved ...

I absolutely love this poem, the 'I' thing is fantastic and really helps tie the poem together. I love your choices of things to say, they are so abstract but ...