Jiggity

Chapter 2. He stood, silent and still, letting the night wash over him; concealing, caressing him with its velvety darkness. He didn’t like how things were turning out, he’d been ...

Thanks a lot guys, I'll put the next part up as soon as possible.

Cool. Nicely written Torpid, Im especially impressed with the length; all your other stories were much shorter. Good work, man. Keep it up.

There were some little things I noticed...not worth attention though. Otherwise I think your off to a great start, thats a really good prologue. I assume Saase will be let ...

Thanks a lot guys. Your encouragement helps me, and it will, I hope, only get better. The first half took me, all hour, an hour and a half maybe. The ...

Lmao. I like you Sgt. Salt, that was an amusing post! There are definite grammar problems though, snoink, you should fix that up.

I have yet to read American Gods but I sure am looking forward to it. Im also looking forward to reading the Sandman comic series. Ive been trying to get ...

Thanks a lot fishr, I'll get to fixing those errors. Also, with the jaw-snapping part; if you went to take a large bite out of something and missed, wouldnt your ...

Shadow is the main character, yes, but we will see things from the child's perspective as well. Im not sure how much more I'll be able to write, as school ...

His muscles werent straining, they were 'pumping', it was his veins that were straining against his skin. I put that in just for imagery, so you could see Shadow more ...

He could smell the fear on the child, from his vantage point on the roof, as it walked down the alley. It was a heady smell...full of promise; the promise ...

Thanks alot man. Ive been getting some real positive comments about this story so I'll definetly write more.

What makes you think its any one of those you thought of. Im not that I??

Okay, so, like before I noticed some small grammatical errors. The nasty little buggers that you dont notice whilst writing and are surprised to see later on. Here we go. ...

Hey thanks alot. I know exactly what you mean, I was trying to explain that same thing to my brother this morning, however he failed to understand. It will definitely ...