Jenthura

This is a cool story, a little late for the Paul contest, but cool nonetheless. Great job with the origanal spin! *and yeah, I have no nitpicks* >__

Ah, shoot, I forgot to attach the image. Here it is now.

Hey, Charcoalwolfman, I'll review this later, 'kay? It's an excellent story!

Wow, I'm not sure what the contest was about, but I love your submission! I'm a little rushed for time now, so can I get back to you to review ...

I'm saving this spot for a very, very large review, RH! :D

I ditto Razcoon! This is smawesome!

Ahahahahaha! This is amazing, my friend! I really don't have much to say about the poem in general, since I suck at reviewing poetry, but the content and imagery is ...

I would, watching you dance in pain from slapping a cast-iron pole. :twisted: Actually, I'm just being mean. :P

Go slap a lamp pole, that's pretty much what I look like. :P

Well, that was kinda the whole point to thestory, RH. The pill was a drug, hence the the title, "Paul's Trip to Saturn". ;) And yeah, Paul isn't very smart, ...

Ah, to verify the size of the pool? Thanks for the suggestion, Writingruff!

Yeah, I'm sure LOTR geeks could pick over the technicalities of my Elvish grammar (which is probably horrible) but the essential idea is good enough. Thanks for pointing that out, ...

Thanks, Dudette! I'm so glad this piece wasn't forgotten. I'll work on those errors now...

Beware the Azilas, bearing reviews. ;) Seriously, after Azi gets through a piece, there's nothing let over for any one else to nitpick. Nice work, though! Jenth

Thanks, Beil, it was about time you got your payback fun and slaughtered a work of mine :P About the 'grasps/gasps' I really did mean for it to be 'grasps'. ...