Jenthura

Very intriguing, your idea of a second mind in the same body. I believe you did well to express the technicalities and tricks of such a relationship. However, your voice ...

3. Save someone's life Someday, you will decide to talk to the annoying beef-and-cheese bald man while you wait at the stop light. You will pursue your discussion of broccoli ...

Hey! You chose the same three elements I did. Unless...this is a submission to Trident's contest, right? You never said it was a submission, but you did put watermelon seeds, ...

Hi there! This story was…refreshing, but I really think you wasted a lot of potential. I’ll explain later, for now, the nitpicks. Oh, but first, In your title, the ‘The’ ...

Hey, Drawers, nice story, but you should have credited the original writer of that poem, or else it could be seen as plagiarism. You know, just a little "~Robert Frost" ...

Well done, Jashy! I really liked it! Like, *like* liked it. :D I didn’t get the chance to listen to it, so my review may be a little scattered. Hope ...

Skins! I saved this page some time ago, but never really got down to doing a review. Here it is now (nitpicks first, if you don’t mind). We lived on ...

I can't do poetry, really, I've tried. All I wanted to say was about that one line, "Because hearing butterflies roar..." You posted that on your profile some time ago, ...

Hey, is this finished? It's seems very pointless at the end, but you built it up so well! It was very funny before the last paragraph, even though you did ...

Your action was very well done, and you got the whole back-story somewhat in place. It’s a rather clichéd story, but you did a decent job of it. Overall, nicely ...

Jalmoc, your speaking ‘voice’ is weak and choppy. You described action in few sentences as simple facts, stating them and moving on. What you should really do is linger over ...

My goodness, three-two days of work and you only got one review? You definitely deserved more than that. I'm going to download this and read it overnight, I'll maybe have ...

At first I was like, ugh, another clichéd love-sick dream, but it was rather good! I love the repetitive ending and the buildup of emotion and suspense as the guy ...

Well, it was somewhat okay, not very many spelling or grammar mistakes (although that was probably because the whole centered text thing made it hard to find errors). I think ...

Hi there! Here on YWS, we normally post things slowly. You, however, have put down seven chapters in twenty minutes. I suggest you slow down, or you may lose potential ...