Jenthura

By all means, you should continue writing. It may never be published, but it'll be a very good writing practice for the author in you. What I mean is this: ...

First off, here’s a big thank you for all the compliments and constructive criticism you posted on my art works. Secondly, I’d like to congratulate you on your style of ...

First off, you misspelled "Curtain" Secondly, putting a blanket on someone's face won't kill them. If it's a thick one, and soaked with water, however, it'll work. Don't ask me ...

Hmm, good, good, but I think you should give the dog a voice. There's no personality, and I can hardly connect with him, since he's just telling the story the ...

Hmm, it was good, but you were very redundant with 'the man'. You may have a reason for withholding his name, but it get's pretty noticeable right around here. The ...

Hey there! I know this story is old (by two years) but it was such a nice story…and I couldn’t resist doing a thorough review. Strikeouts are what I deemed ...

These are the points that I thought need the most work. Throughout the draft, you err on the grammatical principle of creating a new paragraph after every dialogue segment. I’ve ...

Hey Queen, here's a link to a site that might help you. Do tell me it that helped, as I really like what you've written so far. Also, for some ...

Hey Treehugger! Nice story, but I have a few points to point out. (1) The first ‘quest’ seemed far too easy. They simply flew there, grabbed the stone, and then ...

:D Haha, an obsession with oranges. I really like this piece. But, you've still got a few problems. OK, the little girl's dialogue was a little too stiff, not at ...

Hey there! I haven't got the time now, but I'm saving this page to review later (offline). Keep a weather eye on this spot for a review! Jenth EDIT: Let’s ...

Hmm, very good, but it needs some work. Take a look at the things I’ve pointed out. Take note that some are merely preferences or opinion, the rest are grammatical ...

Message Begin The Review Hey, Wannabe! You’ve got good potential, and this story could take off into a full-fledge novel. However, it’ll take some time and sorting and editing before ...

Great work! But I can see how you've compressed the plot that belongs in a book. Here in a short story, it sounds rushed at the end. I really think ...

'Naïve' can be somewhat synonymous with stupid, or gullible. It doesn't mean humble. 'Chaste' means innocent, also not humble. I've never heard the song, but I can imagine I wouldn't ...