Jenthura

Hey there, Z, here to review as promised! I’ll be a little harsh, but you can take that, right? The dark column slowly rose from the forest, casting a shadow ...

I hope you don't mind me saying so, but your current stuck state inspired me! Ink, a ball point pen and some imagination; yours, of course. :D EDIT: drat, it ...

Hey, I read this and definitely want to illustrate the part where she jumps off the building, but I think you get to choose. However, you've gotta win the contest ...

Hmm, I don't want to do a big review and all, just one question: What if the language itself isn't sexist, what if the people are? Also, another people question: ...

Hmm, this is really long. Massive blocks of text scare a reader away or, in some cases, bore them (example above, sorry Calli). Break this up into two parts, double ...

And so now I'm stuck here writing this, And please don't tell them what I'm about to say, Fancy imagery and fresh phrases are something I desperately miss kiss . ...

Hey there! I think you intended this to be something like an advertisement from the future. However, you had only the advertisement, and really nothing else. My suggestion is that ...

Alright, because this is so totally weird and unprecedented, I’m going to have to respond in a totally weird and unprecedented way. Let me break it down to some basic ...

Changing World Once your arm falls off, it’s not hard to figure out that the day is going to go way downhill. This opening sentence is brilliant. It’s got just ...

Hey, Redleaf! This short short piece is good in that the idea is clear and unspoiled, but you make a few mistakes here and there. A writer's serendipity: we think ...

Hi, jenth here Hmm, Leah refers here Mum, so I'm guessing that she's related to the dead guy. However, she's clearly unperturbed at his death and the 'halo of blood' ...

Woah. You actually took the story-maker seriously. I mean, given that particular sentence, I would have made him turn into a penguin metaphorically , Y'no? :D Anyways, it has a ...

Hmm, I've read the phrase 'happy teeth' before, one of Isaac Asimov's works. Never mind, you used it well, and the story is definitely a win. It also reminds me ...

Grooss!! Well, in a good way I suppose. Hmm, well, for a prologue, you did very well *likes*. It pulls the reader right in, and promises so much in coming ...

Hmm, well first off, nice block of text. No, seriously, you'll scare your reader away right from the start. After that, the body is perfect, except for the fact that ...