Jen_Li_Ha

hmm I like this story. But there's something with the dialog that gets me slightly light headed, I don't get caught by it, but it could just be me, got ...

aww I found this story really cute (If it was not meant to be cute, don't hate me..!) :roll: and such lovely names :shock: just adorable! :D keep it up ...

I loved the beginning, a abit dark and mysterious :twisted: And I won't bother with grammars and such, because I still understand what you're telling me with this so... thumbs ...