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Wow. I have to say, this is probably my favorite out of all the poems I've seen on YWS so far. The run-on sentences don't really bother me at all, ...

Great poem! I'm trying to squeeze some critique out of my mind... no, I can't really. Interesting subject, it reminds me of ancient Egyptians and their attitude on the afterlife. ...

I'm really liking it so far. The intro was especially original. And I actually mean that, I have the oddest soft spot for that sort of style. Paradise's bit was ...

That's really true, about the lack of fantasy stories set in Africa. And this one seems to be set on being seriously awesome. The detail works well with the size ...

I kind of like how the prompt was about a football player which you Incorporated without making it about football. Your style is really nice, it's realistic and believable without ...

This is so sweet and sad. I love the end especially. I have to compliment you on the rhyming simply because I can't rhyme for my life. "some days there ...

I actually think this is great, I mean, I've never really put down why I write, but some of your statements make me wonder whether you've read my mind. You ...

I like how the timing's set up, and it seems like an interesting premise for a story so far. I particularly liked the numbered days. I'm unsure whether to advise ...

If a person counts, then yeah. I'm not seeing them for a month. :\ Anyway, this also reminded me of those dystopia novels that always have you questioning whether anything ...

A good deal indeed. I've often heard people speak/write about feeling like they're split. I find it especially interesting when they speak about "developing" that personality. I have three main ...