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WEll i liked it, i didnt like how you explained every single thing that happened to him (I assume) with such detail. I agree the last sentence wasn't that great ...

When i read stories, i do not look for grammar mistaks as most other people do. I look for parts that seem dull or dont fit in and try to ...

This is extremely good. I loved how you didnt tell the gender or age of this character, even though you gave hints to what it was as in when you ...

I liked it but... 1. It really wasn't a poem more like a story. 2. There was really no point to it. 3. It was kind of cheesy. What I ...