Jared

Yes, black hole has a space between it. Thanks for catching that.

Now that I think about it, it might be best if I post another one of these with more examples and more so-called "steps" to the formula.

I thought about my usage of "I" in many different cases. Mostly because english teachers suggest you don't use a lot of them. Thanks for finding the mistakes I missed ...

In hindsight, I probably should have proofread this better.

I had my cat read this and he just wouldn't stop chattering on and on about the cat revolution and his views of society! Very thought-provoking!

^ Indeed.

^ Indeed.

Thanks. I was definitely going for the simplistic, gritty language. I like Stephen King novels, and I like his gritty, layman's writing style (though sometimes I prefer different styles). In ...

Thanks for your review! And, I just want to say, I'm not trying to make him out to be too much of a bad-ass just yet, because I don't think ...

Ah, I did consider putting the prologue in front of this chapter. I actually think I'll do that to save people time.

Thanks for the folder advice. I've been meaning to do that.

I agree with some, disagree with some. Here's the deal. For me, and most writers I should hope, most information should be doled out in dialogue and not in a ...

Thanks for the review, and I will take what you said into account. Once again, it seems evident that you didn't read the prologue (if you did, my apologies). Besides ...

Thanks for the review. I'm not sure if you read the prologue to this chapter, but if you didn't, that would explain some of your confusion.

Thanks, and I'm glad you're a fan! It's reviews like this that give me motivation to continue with the story. I was wondering if you could comment on the "adult" ...