Jalmoc

I really liked this story! One of the greatest fears of Humans is the fear of drowning. I thought that you really captured the emotion of that fear. Other than ...

I'm not trying to bash on this story or anything, but this sounds exactly like a story I read out of my English book. It was titled The Sniper, by ...

I'm not very good at reviewing poems, but if it's any help, I really really liked it!! Lol. :D Well Keep Writing!! :) Sincerely, --Jalmoc

I really thought this was interesting. I love how you described the feeling of blood (not trying to be weird or anything. lol). It makes me wonder if animals really ...

Wow! Just wow! This story took some real skill to put together. I love the idea of the time difference between the worlds. So a question, where did his shadow ...

I felt like this was really rushed. Why do all of these girls agree to marry him? Just because he gave them gifts? There must be more behind it. Also, ...

The Enchanted Ones The sun beamed on my skin; the heat leaving it with a stinging sensation. Chatter from people both near and far rung in my ears, along with ...

Hello! I am a very huge fan of Dragon Age: Origins and all the others. I love how you captured the battle graphics in this story!! I think you should ...

Ok,... I hope that this isn't from experience. But, i feel like the last part of this should go in a blog, not a story. You captured the imagery pretty ...

I know that many people have commented on this, but i absolutely LOVED this!!! I couldn't stop laughing through the entire thing!!! Thank you for writing this! :D

I immediately got lost from the beginning. It seems like you just stuck sentences together, trying to make sense of it. One thing i got really confused on was the ...

Hi there! I'm Jalmoc. :D So i randomly read stories like a good writer and comment. Lol. so to your story. I felt like it was kind of rushed.... How ...

You've put my heart in turmoil... I love the Zelda series, I never would have expected this. Its very well written though, excuse me while i wipe the tears from ...

Hello! My name is Jalmoc, it's a pleasure to meet you! Ummm, first off, I think you should move this to romance. It's just more of a romance than a ...

Bonjour! J'ai m'appelle Jalmoc, enchante'. This was a very good pice of romance if I do say so myself. Honestly, I don't really think that you need ro slow it ...