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The promised critique: Nit-Picks It was a thing that she had dearly bought, though not with money. Thing? Ew. Find a different word. She stopped. She found the phrase that ...

*Boogies* You know I love you, Snoink, and I'm super excited to read this. XD I already read the first part, up to 'looks like', and I looove it! *Glee* ...

The promised critique: Nit-Picks He really should not be at that place. Should be: 'He really should not have been at that place.' At his age boys do not care ...

The promised critique: Overall Comments Hmm… it's not your best work, Con. And you made the same mistakes over and over again, so I think an overall would benefit you ...

The promised critique: Nit-Picks We get so lonely anymore. Grammar mistake – I can't fix it 'cause I don't know what you meant, but look at it. within it. Then, ...

Hey ProfessorRabbit! Thanks so much for entering the CIA contest. Yours was a very nice read, and definitely original. However, I'm a lazy bum. So I'm gonna put this in ...

Here's your critique for entering CIA's grammar contest. Jabbs will give you one shortly. So, I'm a lazy-bum, okay? I'm too lazy to do nit-picks here. So open up that ...

Here's your critique for entering CIA's grammar contest. Nit-picks are attached 'cause I'm a lazy bum. XD Hmm... actually, this isn't gonna count as a critique, is it? But it ...

Not a promised critique, but I figured I'd read this part, too. She’s never been in a house before. You need to make it more obvious that she lives in ...

The promised critique: Helen went all the way to Galway to the clothes bank and found her some things. Tam doesn’t much like dressing up, but she lets Mam this ...

Here comes the promised critique: He turned and kicked his computer, hard. That couldn’t do it or anything else any good, but it felt good to him. He was frustrated. ...

Nit-Picks The last time I saw Duncan before the accident was the night of our father's arrest. Duncan had fought with me about [s]dad's [/s] Dad's case[s],[/s] ; he didn't ...

Nit-Picks My mind won’t leave me alone! Ditch that exclamation point. I’ll give every happy thought, every happy moment I ever had before that day. All you give me is ...

Hello! Overall Comments I'm not going to give you a nit-pick, because you can easily catch any mistakes you made and nothing jumped out at me. So! First things first. ...

Okay, so I was talking to Sade, and I told him to pick a number between one and eight. He chose seven, which meant I was going to critique science-fiction. ...