JFW1415

Jeez...what's with all your 'write more now!' reviews? *Shrug* Ah, well, you're still getting real ones from me, unless you complain. Same format as always. Highlighted Comments 1. Who’s talking? ...

Why is it that all of your threads are beginning to look like they're supposed to be on FictionPress? *Shrug* Ah, well, hopefully you still like my detailed critiques. Same ...

Hello! In your blog you said you needed more critiques, so here I am! Enjoy! The numbers next to the highlighted text correspond with the 'highlighted comments' below. Highlighted Comments ...

I'm back! Without my famous (hopefully :P) review, though, since it's not needed. Chapter Three After dinner everyone went back into the parlour. I looked up at the clock o ...

Just a quick review, as I am short on time and promised these ages ago. :wink: Chapter One They also had a baby brother who spent most o f his ...

You told me to review, so I read through this thing. Now I feel bad; I don't know many people. :oops: I was very lost. :lol: What I did understand ...

The promised review. :wink: Highlighted Comments 1. Didn’t you just say it was always there? 2. Yes, it will. For a while. 3. I don’t know why, but I found ...

The promised review. :wink: Highlighted Comments 1. Suggestion: ‘her hands pressed against…’ You use ‘she’ a lot in this area. 2. I don’t like the repetition of ‘this.’ 3. What’s ...

You write too mcuh. :wink: Again, I'm lazy, so the comment is in the attachment. 50 comments! And overall stuff. :roll: Few points this way, but oh, well. Oh, and ...

You told me this was okay, but if it's not let me know. I get less points, but it takes less time. ~JFW1415 EDIT: Jeez. 15 points for something that ...

Heads up: I have not read any of the other comments. Also, I'm lazy, and you said you didn't mind file attachments, so here you go. (I'm also more in-depth ...

Heehee…This is from another one of the ‘is your story clichéd?’ quiz. I knew I had seen something like this, went searching, and figured I’d show you it, just to ...

First, this is rather...short. It's hard to critique, especially since it's non-fiction. However, I shall try! :lol: (I did promise I would, so...) Despite these similarities, it is the differences ...

*Points above* Jabbs is brilliant; listen to her. Oh, and I'm not doing a nit-picky review, because it's already done. :wink: I suggest ditching everything up to 'I waited for ...

I'm sorry to say that I can't stand this piece. But! It's not your writing. You just use such an advanced, old-age vocabulary that I hate it. *Shrug* I have ...