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The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...

The ( Side Characters ) contest has finally ended, and here is your critique! Anyways, I think I'll explain how I am scoring this before I read further than the ...

Hello, Mr. Bear! Your fiance shall be your critiquer today. :) Nit-Picks I mean, if grown men had no hair under their armpits, they would be incomplete. We were discussing ...

Suz, my flail buddy! *Grin* So, I've been hearing 'bout this story for ages, and I just got to read it. I'm impressed, my friend, and I want to see ...

Nit-Picks She started down the first step, with her hand in the air, searching for the railing. Just the way she took the first step, I could see the faith ...

Nit-Picks Lucy, the devil worshiper, was sitting next to me. “So, I was at the graveyard last night,” like almost all her stories started, “and this thing, it was like ...

Nit-Picks “Oh, shucks.” She giggled. “If I didn’t warsh the floor every Monday it wouldn’t look like that, trust me.” Wouldn't you need to wash it even more than that ...

Nit-Picks I ran away from home when leaves were hanging to trees by their last vein. Actually, it was more like walking away from home, because I look stupid when ...

The promised critique, part two! Nit-Picks This made me happy because I was doing something to help Leo. I'd ditch this. I personally can't stand it when he tells us ...

The promised critique is finally here! Nit-Picks It took me two years to become a postman. To pass the test I had to carry a seventy pound bag of mail ...

Part One I'm afraid to read this. Really – I'm trembling in my… bare feet? Yeah. It's long. You have moderators critiquing it. And you *are* a moderator. All that ...

The promised critique. :) Nit-Picks I am standing on a beach, where instead of sand I squish my toes into smooth, blue, crystal like pebbles. To make this more mystical, ...

First off, I am so sorry I took so long to get to this. But it is so long ! Gah. Oh, well, hopefully I can finish all parts today. ...

I’m baaaaack! :) Nit-Picks Shuqiao sat on the steps of the capitol with her knees drawn to her chest, waiting. It was foggy and dank, the kind of weather where ...

So, I finally get to critique a piece by the amazingness that is Sam? Exciting. :) I’m kind of worried that I won’t find anything, but I’ll give it my ...