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Re: path of the warrior §
This is a common flaw. Capitalizing words that ought not be capitalized makes no sense. It just makes you look amateur. In a romance poem, I may be able to ...
Jan 23, 2008 -
Re: Death Amongst Lovers
I'll just leave some basic notes (because this poem is composed of basic flaws and little else) -the aabb rhyme scheme is poor, especially when you don't have a syllabic ...
Jan 23, 2008 -
Re: George Orwell's Animal Farm
This is worth a 20/20, actually. Take it into context. He was speaking out against communism at a time when communism wasn't hated (unless I'm mistaken--my head is swimming badly) ...
Jan 23, 2008 -
Re: Musings of Leaving Home
I like this. You don't rape the rhyme, though it is simple. It’s okay to walk through the car park in impending dark. Lampposts and fog make sky look pink ...
Jan 23, 2008 -
Re: Mental Masturbation
While I applaud the general ideas (I wrote the biggest piece of blasphemy ever to grace a teenage forum just last night) this is little better than a church sermon. ...
Jan 22, 2008 -
Re: Broken Glass
Broken glass, Whisper your stories. Melt the tears Of cold, dead hearts. Alright. I'm sure you're aware of the defunct capitalization rule here. It's really out of class to capitalize ...
Jan 22, 2008
