Izzyeyore

Hey, I guess that I'll continue where Ghostwriter left off :D Tom looked at his electronic scooter and sighed. At least he can ride this thing again. could still ride ...

I agree with strawberrywine there really isn't much for the reader to go on, you seem to be listing what they do, I liked how you did the grades, on-purpose ...

I think that this story has a lot of potential, continue? :D I liked it a lot, and your grammar was ok, although you could work a bit on punctuation ...

This poem is amazingly beautiful and touching, I love it my only comment is an your spelling of "chaos" as "caos" other than that, great job! I'm sorry for your ...

I really liked this one, too! The twist about Tom makes it more realistic, because, of course, to every love story there must be a jealous or spurned male, but ...

You make it seem like they're teenagers in the beginning of the story. Thy then meet each other on the stone a year or so later, and then 10 years ...

My father was a merchant in the spice trade and he had warehouses filled with the potent packages . maybe get rid of the "he" and for the second bit ...

I like your use of "Her" for the mother (right?), although it implies that the character either hates or reveres the mom. Your story, however, doesn't confirm either. She seems ...

I thought that overall this story is amazing! I love the plot and premise, but there are also certain oddities. Your language in most of the story is fluid and ...

The premise of the story is cute, no doubt about it, but it's a bit cliché. Theres another story on here, i believe called nothing's fair in teen love and ...