Izzyeyore

This is really confusing to me... maybe I'm weird though.... But in any case, this could be a lot shorter; right now it seems (to me, at least) to be ...

Even though I have been living here for a year, France was still breath taking. But this man looked French. He moved in a French manor, sipped his mocha in ...

ok, hi, welcome to YWS and pre-warning, sorry about my probably over-harsh critique (the stuff in bold is what I would suggest adding, and the other comments that pertain to ...

First comment, yess, so: I loved this! The beginning was nice, a bit vague in the verbage (yey new word!) and the way they spoke, but that makes sense since ...

hey, if you could PM me when you finish the next chapter, that would be amazing! I've noticed that you use the same phrases a lot like "not dissimilar", which ...

Sorry! but one thing, they seem just a bit... well, young .... to be "kissing passionately" Then again, maybe i just grew up in the wrong neighborhood :wink: Haha just ...

Wow, I'm in awe of your talent :D The sheer amazingness of that story overloaded my pet peeve brain, so I'm not going to write them up. No, seriously, though, ...

I think that it's now just about as close to perfect as you can get :D My only issue is this one: her voice a little rugged from running to ...

I liked it a lot, although the ending seemed to be a bit abrupt, maybe have her hug him or something before she leaves? I dunno, but this story was ...

I thought it was really well-written, etc. with just a few tiny grammar/spelling/quotation errors. However, there is something I have to say that is a bit...erm... negative: when Rom sees ...

YAY! First post! Haha, so basically all I can say is wow. I really liked that! Sometimes there were little things, like commas missing, but they're very easy to fix. ...

Wow..... This is amazing! If you could PM me when you post the next chapter, I would love you forever! :D seriously, though, this is definitely publishable stuff...

I liked this; from what I read at least. What does she mean, you think, 'from what i read' well, it's like this: Your story consisted of very intimidating and ...

That was great, my only comment is your use of the apostrophe-s. Here are the little things I noticed: Even those two brute’s in the seat’s behind them never spoke. ...

I really like it, just one mistake that annoys me, as it is a pet peeve.... Derek laughed at her and Chole balled up a napkin and through it at ...