Inkitorix

Hi Eimear, I'm new too :P I love the first half, but I think it goes downhill from 'where men and women...'. Firstly because the rhythm of that line is ...

I quite like this poem especially the first verse. The only thing is, the rhythm is a bit odd and to solve this I would make the 'I have's into ...

I hate you more than yellow, I hate you more than pink, I hate you more than death, Without you I don’t know where’d I be, I realize everything you ...

I love it, its captivating from the first line. There's just two things I think could improve it, firstly the word dribbling. It sounds too like something falling out of ...