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Re: From Here on Out
I liked this poem,but one thing i didn't get was Even as the winds serpent,viper and strike. personally it didnt make sense, but i did get what you trying to ...
Sep 21, 2011 -
Re: The playground is burning
This is a very good story but there are things to work on. They have been mentioned before so I won't bore you repeats. I did really enjoy the newscasts ...
Aug 13, 2011 -
Re: Warriors
i am a big fan of the warrior series and all in all this is a good story line, but it all seemed to happen very fast. there were alot ...
Jul 21, 2011 -
Re: Silver Chains
This is really good and I really want to keep reading hurry up and write more of it. There are some errors though like one place there should be Leg ...
Jun 30, 2011 -
Re: Wither
This piece is really good and I really like it. I especially like Small tears of silver light tumbled in through the narrow windows. It's a very good story line ...
Jun 29, 2011 -
Re: Blue ~Prologue and Chapter 1
i like the idea but you need to clarify a few points. you just kinda dropped on us that blue was a witch all of a sudden. it seems that ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: The Hunting Dog - Chapter 2
This is really good also but like I said i'm good at nitpicking but he had to this eyes to protect them from the blowing sand. I don't know if ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: Change and Survival: The Experiments' Story- Chapter 4
I think that you should reword this Her head shot up as pain shot up her tail. It might be better if it was worded "Her head shot up as ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Change and Survival: The Experiments' Story- Chapters 2 & 3
It's good but you need to work on you r grammar a little bit, in the first sentence it should be and Faith shared." also "was,as always" please put a ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Change and Survival: The Experiments' Story- Chapter 1
This is a very good story, I enjoy reading this. There are some places I would consider revising synch as She looked up to see Another one of her small ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Change and Survival: The Experiments' Story
This is a very good prologue, I really liked your description of the burly guards dragging in the girl with dirty blonde hair, it Captivates me. ;) It really makes ...
Jun 8, 2011
