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1: I just liked the rhythm of not having %u201Cof his window%u201D in there 2:I absolutely agree here, I%u2019ll watch for this as I keep writing. 3: I agree that ...

Funny I have to rate this for people over my own age. And the age of the characters for that matter.

Thanks! I put out all fifteen as one document earlier today, they should be in the poetry section if you%u2019re interested.

Thanks! I plan to, there%u2019s a second part I%u2019m working on called %u2018the crown of the night%u2019, it%u2019s going to be a heroic crown of sonnets, a poetic form where ...

You%u2019re welcome, I didn%u2019t realize how long the review was until I posted it, ha! Anyway, rough drafts are good, I look forward to seeing more of this story.

it is supposed to be sep0erated into two stanzas, the separation occurs after the third line.