HystericalSav

I liked it. It was good. Short, but good. It was a bit cliché, but apart from that, I liked it a lot. I like how you put rare description ...

I like how you started off with, "The story started with a bag of wet mice. Wait... I should set the scene first." It pulled me into the story because ...

In the beginning you wrote, "As we crashed through the glass,". I think you should add a bit more description into it, maybe describing how the glass hit the windshield ...

I honestly thought this was really good. It put tears to my eyes. I don't know how you can fix it, because I think it's perfect already. I love how ...

Wow. Just wow. That was honestly incredible. I love how you can write something so short but it becomes a masterpiece. I also love how you incorporated enough details in ...