Hypocrit

Critiqued something old of yours. WAs left out on top. Feel bad. Here's a real one. "Monotonous drumming echoes dismally As the soldiers march through the once cheerful streets Feigning ...

No depth. Nothing but caricatures, ghosts. You want bones, not nostalgic photo-prints all thumb worn and rustic. First, descriptive words like "angry" should be dropped or avoided as much as ...

What the... Really? Wait, your name is purple, does this mean what it means on TW? Are you a moderator? Oh my... Wha... really? Hahaha. Kind of funny. They told ...

Probably were NOT attempting to make this serious, which is really too bad. Why do anything at all if you're not going to throw your all into it? You reuse ...

Wow. I thought he was hard on me... Ok now I wouldn't say that. Yes there is alotta fluff but you have an idea and an image thats one thing. ...

I really like the shortness of it. However, in a short poem you need to make sure each line is killer. Or maybe thats just my opinion. Now I think ...