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Hey, I think you really should keep going on this. I really like it. The description is really good. I can't wait for more!

Oh yes, the good old Chicken Soup for the Soul books. Yeah I've read this story before and your right it is absolutely beautiful and it shows that people do ...

Thanks Qi! I'm very proud to receive the very first QGGF award! :D I'd like to thank my parents and my siblings and my friends... etc, etc. Yeah I um ...

Thanks, I guess going back and changing the title on Chapter One in the first place would have caused less confusion lol. Sorry about that.

Oh thanks a lot Brian! Actually though the one you commented on wasn't the chapter one to this story. I'll go back and put the title on it for you. ...

Hey I liked reading this a lot. You only made a few grammar mistakes but that's about it. I can't really help you on the verb thing. I'm terrible also. ...

Thanks that does help. Oh my gosh you noticed the name thing? I really didn't mean to have it like that. I just liked the name Jayme ALOT and then ...

Thanks Sam.

Very nice. I really can't find anything for you to improve on, but I really like the description and you wrote it well.

Oh, great job. I liked the description, and it felt like I was right there with you. I really liked it, but it was sad. Good job.

Oh my gosh, I like it. It's really funny. Human blood? Yeah it's really unique, I have to agree with that. I like it better than your other one too.

Oh, I really like it. I'm sorry I couldn't find anything to critique on (maybe that's a good thing :) ). I hope you post more soon.

Is there more? All I could find was that you could use more of an entrance. I like it, and I think you wrote it well.

Thanks for the help Sam!

Yeah your welcome. I'm glad you posted it, I really like the beginning it makes me want to read more.