HaydenMacaw

I know I already critiqued, but I have one additional comment--any confusion concerning the line: Has been is will be could be fixed with italizes, so the it looks like: ...

Thanks for all the great critiques! I took everything into consideration :D For future viewers, I have edited the poem above. Your imput is greatly appreciated!

This poem is absolutely seamless. Each line flows perfectly into the next. Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I love the last two lines--amazing. I also like the line Like flightless wings flutter I also got the feeling of age/passge of time while I was reading it, which ...

The tense transition between line 6 and 7 is a little rough, and I don't like the word repent. Other than that, exellent poem!

Thanks for the advice! I edited it above. If you would like to look at it again that would be awesome.

Amazing! The rhyme in the first three stanzas feels fource, but after that it is flawless. I love the epic quality.