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Re: (insert interesting title here)
I know I already critiqued, but I have one additional comment--any confusion concerning the line: Has been is will be could be fixed with italizes, so the it looks like: ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: I hate love poems
Thanks for all the great critiques! I took everything into consideration :D For future viewers, I have edited the poem above. Your imput is greatly appreciated!
May 14, 2011 -
Re: As Much As I Love You?
This poem is absolutely seamless. Each line flows perfectly into the next. Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Shipwreck
I love the last two lines--amazing. I also like the line Like flightless wings flutter I also got the feeling of age/passge of time while I was reading it, which ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Remorse.
The tense transition between line 6 and 7 is a little rough, and I don't like the word repent. Other than that, exellent poem!
Mar 27, 2011 -
Re: Where Are You?
Thanks for the advice! I edited it above. If you would like to look at it again that would be awesome.
Mar 18, 2011 -
Re: River Runs Red
Amazing! The rhyme in the first three stanzas feels fource, but after that it is flawless. I love the epic quality.
Feb 16, 2011