Hattable

Hi pretz, thanks for another review. I don't have much time at the moment so I'll quickly clarify a couple of things... Smirks died, and when someone dies I imagine ...

Thanks, I'm surprised this has done this well :P I didn't use much punctuation because some of the lines are supposed to be connected as sentences. It was a bit ...

*Didn't clarify* In the outline Riley saw the Flier first and grabbed the cloak. But while writing this I forgot about that and was too lazy to edit it so ...

Thanks, Falco! I didn't notice the "unconscious, or dead., hopefully the latter" thing, I'll fix that as soon as I can. As for Riley tossing on the old man's cloak... ...

Wow, really? I wrote this to show why I [i]shouldn't[/s] write poetry. Apparently I'm not as bad as I thought... I still think it's a pretty dumb poem, but thanks! ...

Thanks :D Chapter 5 will be coming soon and we should get some more clarification of Riley's past...

I'm sure you'll improve, and yes, a lot XD That review was more than 4300 characters. Wow, allot of grammar mistakes xD Should be "Wow, a lot of grammar mistakes ...

Oh, and the guards dragging Michael into the cell when he's first introduced jolted to attention because Smirks (was supposed to) yelled at them and surprised them, even though they ...

Hi pretz, thanks for the review. I'll try explaining as much as I can... First off, the main character's name is mentioned in the second chapter (as you'll probably have ...

I'm glad it was, I was worried that I was annoyingly rambling on about apostrophes :P

Thanks for all of your reviews :D :P I'm glad you've liked it so far, I was more worried about this chapter than any other because I felt that I'd ...

Thanks :D I'm trying to end each of the chapters on an awesome, cliffhanger-y line. :P Lucky for you, Chapter 4 was just finished and should be up sometime tomorrow ...

Wow, I saw you mention that transitions were difficult and I was just waiting for a negative comment. Glad I did it so well :D Don't worry, the reason for ...

Thanks for the very long review :P I know that the paragraphs are far too long, but I wrote this a while ago and at the time I wasn't very ...

Hi Falco, I realized that the paragraphs were long when I posted it, they were even longer before XD I'm not sure how naming all three of the family members ...