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Hi Ray. Wow. I have to say, I'm impressed. I really enjoyed reading this - what an interesting concept you've got here! I love finding original works like this. You ...

Hi anonymous. This was interesting. Rather vague, though. But it was nicely executed, nonetheless. Prologues don't have to be this melodramatic, either. Like metalamor stated above me, you might want ...

Hi Biffle. I can't tell if this is a trainwreck or brilliant, but I like the choppy, frantic style. Unfortunately, this comes to a weird ending that isn't actually an ...

Hi Story. I wouldn't bother revising this - just scrap it and start fresh. You begin this as a hopeful, fleshed-out story, and for whatever reason decide to cram a ...