Hallie

Hey, thanks to everyone for reviewing. It really means a lot to hear what other writer's think of my work. I know there are a couple of mistakes, such as ...

I agree with the others. Simple, beautiful yet dark and deep, so naturally I was gutted when I realised that it was only a few lines shorter. Other than that ...

As others have said, there were other ways you could have written this. On the other hand, I think the way in which you have written it is supreme and ...