Haiimthomas

She wears a yellow and orange-striped top with a spaghetti strap, a pair of daisy dukes, and a pair of socks with a red line around the ankle. It was ...

the addition of his brother was last minute. Even the hanging was rushed. I was stuck with a lack of anything interesting that wouldn't make the story too long. I ...

Thankyou very much :) i'll be sure to make those improvements ;) ~Thomas

Thankyou! :D

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Thankyou for pointing out all my grammatical errors, i'll be sure to change them. Thankyou :D ~Thomas~

Originally this 'short story' was for a year 12 test, and we were told to (there were many other choices, too) write about wearing a mask/hiding your true self. Instantly ...

Thankyou!

i might ask just one question, sorry. Would you recommend changing anything about the writing itself? It could always be better but is there anything obvious, or anything that could ...

Thankyou for this! Really appreciate it and ill be sure to make those changes :) Thomas

Thankyou very much! I will be sure to make those fixes :) Thomas

Thank you for reading! This is only the first draft of it, so any tips/criticisms would be greatly appreciated (or anything i did right, too!) Thanks :) Thomas

Hello! Thomas here. Since i haven't actually read your previous one's (I shall do that now, though!) it was really easy to pick up (As stated by Dracula below, too ...

Hello! Thomas here. I really like what you have done! The characters felt believable and the plot itself is really interesting. Keep doing what you're doing! :) I look forward ...