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Don't worry about it :P

Heya! Sorry I'm getting to you so late. All of your points are super valid, and the fact that I'm constantly shifting tense was a big error when transcribing from ...

Heya! Thanks so much for your review! I think I mentioned this in a reply to LadyJackalope below that I was rewriting this story based on an old draft that ...

My bad! Funny story, my first draft was in the present tense, and I had to painstakingly translate everything to past tense. Thanks for pointing out the verbs I missed. ...

Thanks! ...And good point.

Thank you so much! I'll make sure to keep your advice in mind for future pieces!

I highly disagree about the use of contractions removing the piece's meaning. Shakespeare used plenty of contractions in many of his works. (Have you checked out his 18th Sonnet?) The ...

I totally get what you're talking about, bro. I'm far from experienced in writing free verse, but this particular piece featured a few forced rhymes which could have been avoided. ...

I notice I went a little haywire with the rhyme scheme and stuff. I gave priority to sending the message, and I suppose I left other key elements, such as ...

Thanks so much for your feedback! Like most of my other pieces as of late, my only inspiration to write this piece was whatever I found to my left. (My ...

I've been trying to split from my angsty tendencies because the readers seem to like these light-hearted, "humorous" pieces quite better. Not to mention, I find it a lot more ...

Thanks for the review! The whole "World 3-4" (read "World Three-Four") is a reference to how most of the games in the Super Mario series organizes their levels! In short, ...

Thanks again! I appreciate the feedback :)

Gee, thanks! ...Oh, pardon the unintentional pun. :P

Hmm... I thought I could spice it up with a sprinkle of onomatopoeia and a pun on the word "class". I suppose I should find better, more clever ways to ...