Griffinkeeper

The sad part is that she did accidentally staple herself one time. That'll teach her to mess around with staplers. As to where my sick sister got the inspiration, I'd ...

I like the story, but it seems real sureal. You could probably spend more time describing their journey, that would help out a lot, especially when going from one world ...

You could benefit a lot from the writing tips forum. The story is very difficult to read. It needs more seperation between the paragraphs because the forum doesn't have a ...

Alright it now looks like this: When thinking on who could possibly be the most influential person of the twentieth century, I am really at a total loss. So many ...

Also, the color of lightsabers is determined by the type of stone used. Gems are used to focus the weapon, the type of gem used determines the color. I think ...

I'm not sure about the spelling of some of the words, as I think they might just be the American spelling way...? I wish the story was continued... :( anyway....*sigh* ...

...we all know you wanna kiss him...go ahead see what happens when you you know what it feels like to lose a friend? you will soon. Oh, no wonder why ...

Snoink, we need to talk. First, rope isn't a particularly fast method of killing people. Have you ever seen an evil villan try to kill James Bond with rope? No? ...

------------------------------ Gathering of Tales “Master Jon, is it time for my studies again?” said the little boy, still dressed in his night clothes. The long white robes glided on the ...

I like the story flow. It seemed like you introduced Kondur a little quickly, I would have liked another paragraph to get used to the setting. Also, it doesn't make ...

The armoury was dimly lit; the candlelight flickered in the razor sharp blades and breast plates. It seemed almost as if the room was full of people, the fiery eyes ...

I think you've made a little error. You see, the story has a large plotline, which is divided up into tiny pieces by Chapters. In mysteries in particular, the chapters ...

*A look at Griffins response: All right, remember this isn't serious. It isn't serious. What if it is? It isn't. But what if? It isn't. OK. Then why submit it... ...

I was under the impression that Diamea was an it. Time for my review. I am just a little bored though, so I will make this review more interesting. Su ...

Er... is this a prologue? Oh wait, that's my job. I see this is your first post, hopefully you will introduce yourself to everyone in the Welcome forum. It is ...