GreenTulip

like it says not my work. i posted it for a friend

Altogether, shorten this up, use more imagery, and watch out for what ideas are being conveyed. I hope this review proves useful to you. Have a nice day, and keep ...

Altogether, shorten this up, use more imagery, and watch out for what ideas are being conveyed. I hope this review proves useful to you. Have a nice day, and keep ...

You say that the stories detract from the poem, makes it too long, makes it hard for the reader to care about the characters. But it is the stories and ...

Hi, I would say thank you for the review...but I am not thankful for it. This review is out-of-the-normal range for a review to say that she is naive. The ...

I didn't write this poem. My friend did, and I posted it for her.

i got bored one day and this is pretty much a book that will be in the format of a poem. The characters are unnamed till they are mentioned. One ...

Thank you! I will keep that in mind. One of my friends say I use description too much, but I will edit this as soon as I start o feel ...

It is detracting. If you make at least two paragraphs it would help out more. And it would be better to read and it wouldn't make the reader want to ...

:) Thank you. I will have to change it to a prologue, but most chapters will be through flashbacks(sshhhh, I didn't tell you anything), which explain a lot of things. ...

Thank you :)

Thank you!

Hi.... ummmmmmmmmm, pointing out something does not have to seem so cruel. And telling her to go with a red pen, a GRAMMAR Book, and a Dictionary doesn't sound nice ...

You told her a story (that is going to be published in something) isn't good enough to show to the PUBLIC

I had a set amount of words to write this in.