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Hi Cspr. I really like this. As you said it is really creepy, in a kind of "crawling under your skin" kind of way. It's rather unsettling. It's a really ...

Hi Kawanwak I really like this. I love that you used olden day English on a modern day subject. And I don't think it's awkward at all. Your flow was ...

Hi Butterfinger. I really like this. It reads very well, almost like poetry. Your wording is perfect. I got really drawn into the story. There are a few things you ...

Hi intellectualman I really like this, There is a certain amount of angst and sadness in this that I can relate to. There are a few things you can work ...

This is actually very good, especially for someone who's never written lyrics before. I like that you don't shy away from the morbid details. Don't worry about being too harsh, ...

This was very beautiful. If someone close to me had just passed, I would have wanted to read this. I think you some up the emotion and feeling very well. ...

HI scriptguy I like this. I think your dialogue is very good and solid. There a quite a few witty moments and idea's in here and that's the part you ...

Hi telle_04 This is quite good. It reminds me of Taylor Swift lyrics, especially the song "fearless" that has a reference of dancing in the rain. It is very whimsical ...

Hi Persephonic. I really like this. You have a great skill with flow and words, even though this is fiction, it reads like poetry becauce it is very well put ...

Hi Lena. I really like this. At first I thought the main character was very casual and distant about breaking up with his girlfriend with the line "Not very considerate". ...