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for she had told him many times she loved feeling of hair flying the feeling He felt, not scared in the least as he felt the wind rushing through his ...

To me, something like that more implies that he wasn't just shooting at a mirror, but shooting at his reflection in the mirror. As it stands now, he may have ...

My only suggestion is to give "the man" a name. I haven't read a story in which a viewpoint character was only refered to as "the man" or "the woman." ...

The narration was interesting and personal, like Adam stated, and you've apparently got the world well drawn out. I would have made the piece a little bit longer, but that ...

Caroline’s glass flew through the air, crashing into the TV. She was in a very bad mood at the moment Obviously. She had had what she called a “snotty” customer ...

but more than anything Michael knew it was that she was afraid of someone carrying . Delilah couldn’t understand why anyone would care. caring That's the only mistake I found ...

but other than that I couldn’t bear to lea r n more I added the r If I had believed in god, I would have prayed my heart out right ...

There were a few typos in the piece, but that's nothing new. I'd lsten to SeraphTree; he seems to know a lot about cold temperatures ;) I'd like to know ...

I'm just going to give you my opinion on this piece. I think the genie has some flair, but the woman isn't remotely interesting. Genies aren't new in literature, but ...

I haven't read a fable in a while ;) I forgot how interesting they could be, until now. I really don't have anything to complain about in this tale. I ...

I read your blog earlier this evening, Ayra, and I was looking forward to reading some of your writing :) Anyway, my dad needs to get on soon, so I'll ...

Okay, so the school of fish in this world emit wails of terror, and apparently Brahn had intentions of protecting the fish, but promptly left the issue alone once Aneris ...