GenShawklan

Hi! I'm GenShawklan and I'm here to review. (: This is a nice emotional poem you have; I just had a few comments and suggestions. I shiver violently as I ...

Hi xoCairo! I really liked this. I really, really liked this, actually. It was such a simple idea - I mean, who doesn't stand in front of the mirror and ...

Hey! :) I'm Gen, and I'll be reviewing today. ^-^ I must say, I quite quite liked this. :) Your emotions were so raw and so real I felt everything ...

Hello Nyx! I'm GenShawklan and I'll be reviewing your story today. :) Just a few nitpicks (red is errors, green is suggestions): It was a gloriously sunny day. Bright rays ...

Hello! :) I'm GenShawklan. So far, I think your story is off to a nice start. I only had two complaints: 1. The beginning - waking up from a dream ...

This wasn't too bad, although I do think the whole vampire thing is a little bit cliched now, especially after Twilight. I didn't feel like there was much of a ...

This has the potential to be kind of cool. :) I think some parts could use some work; rather than saying you were thinking about your love for your family, ...

This was a nice short story! :) I just have a few things you could improve: I laughed, but walked him to my car and drove him to the airport. ...

But that quickly, it was already too late. The truck’s screeching breaks, the horrid smell of burning rubber, and my beautiful mother’s blood staining the road, would always be seared ...

Hello Arya56227! I think this novel is off to a great start, and I had a few comments I wanted to share with you. :) If this was hell it ...

I like this so far. :) You really make the characters seem very alive, and I like how they have their own unique personalities. With some work this could be ...

This is neat, but it's a lot like the book Rules by Cynthia Lord. The girl in Rules also has an autistic brother that they have created a set of ...

Maybe instead of calling this section 'Chapter One' you could just leave the date only. Not all books have to have chapter, and this might help make yours unique :)

This is very nice so far! Something that would be kind of cool to add is instead of flat out saying his adopted parents wish they hadn't adopted him, maybe ...

Hi! :) It's not bad so far, but there are some things that might help you improve it. Adding lots of details (but not making it too over the top) ...