Gardevite

Aww thanks very much. For the review and the advice! Just wanted to say there is a comma after "them" I think you may have missed it. :)

Thank you very much. :)

The idea was a product of just sitting around thinking. No, this is a narrative, so I'm talking to the reader, not a specific person. I was referring to smoldering ...

You sure? I completely understand that getting criticism can be tough. I won't sugar coat my reviews, so it may be similar to this one.

It was in the green room, because it only had one full length review.

I never said that. I suggested improvements. It's the point of putting something out for review. Do you recall me saying "I think you have something good going on here"?

Thank you for the review! The poem is about my family. I explained it in response to a previous review. Maybe it could clear some of it. :)

Ohh now I get what you're saying. I appreciate the advice.

Everyone keeps saying that my writing is creepy lately. XD Thank you for the grammar and wording tips :) Also the poem is basically about how everyone in my family ...

I'm sorry but my poem, at least the way I'm seeing it, has no forward-slashes. I think it may be your computer.

Wow, this is an amazingly unique way of exploring the theme of loneliness, and you did it so beautifully! *tips hat*

Thank you dear! Especially for taking the time to point everything out! Your review is extremely appreciated!!!!!!!

Thank you for the kind words!

I'm glad someone found the irony! XD Yes I agree that the story needs some work!

Also I think it's slightly rude to insist that I remove anything from ALL the pieces I write. It's helpful to say it didn't quite fit, it's rude to say ...