Freakette

Thanks~ :D Honestly, I can't wait to finish writing the entire novel so I can edit everything afterwards... Joy... >.< lol. I'll update soon~

It's a nice poem, but as the other comments stated, there are some grammar issues. Nothing too major, but you've been getting your/you're and to/too mixed up a bit too ...

Wow, this was really cool. Interesting, too. It's nice to see something like this every now and then, something a bit more out of the ordinary. Your grammar was good, ...

Thanks guys, the reviews make me happy. ^-^ I'll post more chapters as soon as I can. HunterofFox, thanks~ :D And I didn't even notice that xD lol snickerdooly, when ...

Thanks for the comments everyone, I'll have the next couple chapters up in a few minutes. Re-reading this, yes AgentChameleon, it was a bit stuffed with imagery. AngelKnight900, glad you ...

Twit, thanks for the criticism. I was worrying about if the speech seemed too modern or unrealistic... However, the sketches of the man and Kendell Inkcrest were supposed to be ...

thanks, it means a lot. :D I'll post more soon.

I like the names of the characters, they're interesting. xD But the grammar and phrasing is rather weak... Either way, it sounds like an interesting story idea, but it would ...

I really like Loki's character, he's very well developed. Another great chapter, this idea is very fascinating. :D