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Hello there! So, I find this story quite interesting, though I'm not sure where the plot is going. XD Perhaps it's developed later on in the story? But never mind ...

Wonderful job! Most of the errors I spotted have already been mentioned by dasiamari, and I'm not that much a poet, so I hope you understand. I love the way ...

I believe you have achieved in making this story more mysterious with the prologue. Though I believe there are some fragments that could be changed to become proper sentences, though ...

Very nicely written. I could immediately understand the story from this few lines. The starting paragraph was a great hook. It made me question what you meant when you said, ...

A wonderful short story, I feel. I could sense the emotions that the man had, though I felt that it was not expressed fully. There are not many errors, as ...

The story was very nice. I like the plot so far. Though, there are some things that I need to tell you, in my opinion. Everything went well, though at ...