FlyingInEbony

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I agree with you on punctuation and page breaks. These make it easier to understand the piece through organization. Do you have any suggestions on the content? Originally I was ...

Cannibal, thanks for reviewing! I agree, this isn't really a short story, but it's not a poem, script, or fantasy, action, adventure, romance fiction... So I just picked one. I ...

This is a really sad topic, I wanted to show the intimacy between the mother and the son because when we hear bad news on the television or even on ...

I'm so glad you liked my poem! This certainly gives me inspiration to write new things, thanks for reviewing. :wink: By the way, welcome to YWS, Deane! Hope you'll like ...

Wow, that was fast! Thank you very much, TenYo! I'll try to change my grammar and sentence structure, your thoughts made sense. And you just made my day! :P

Alright-y, I'll start working on this piece right away! Thank you, Carly! Your reviews are always so... substantial. Just sayin'... :smt081

Thank you very much, Dreamy! I'll be sure to pay attention to your works too, I have a feeling they are really good! :P

Thanks for your tip, you've helped me realize a great deal! When I first presented this story, nobody gave me any suggestions on how this story was seen according to ...