Fireweed

[quote]Sohini wrote: I am in love with Bartimaeus. Any more questions? Yes. How'd you get to him first?!?!!? [/quote] :D Heh. Yeah, Amulet of Samaraknd was awesome. Really unique; I ...

OMG I LUVS IT 2!!!!1 Sorry. But yes. Amazing book. Beautiful and tragic. To anyone who enjoyed it, I'd highly reccomend Snow Flower and the Secret Fan, by Lisa See. ...

This definitely has potential... I think if you made the edits Meep suggested and added some stronger imagery, it would easily become a much more powerful piece. Remember: Show, don't ...

In deepest red of passions grace, Maybe someone's pointed this out already, but "passions" needs an apostrophe. I agree with Claudette on this. This is a very impressive poem, especially ...

This is a really intriguing beginning, and the description is very vivid. I have no idea what's going on, but that's a good thing- it means I HAVE to read ...

I love the first stanza; the idea of gossip and vindictiveness as fashionable trends really worked. What's up with the ellipse, though? I don't think you need it. You could ...

I won't comment on punctuation, because I'm pretty sure you're intentionally not using it as some kinda stylistic thingy. That aside, I really enjoyed this; very pretty, lyrical phrases. However, ...

I don't really have anything to critique! I really love the simple yet vivid imagery here. As Thinker suggested, you could capitalize the first letters of each line, but that's ...

It's sweet and pretty, and the rhyme scheme is well done, but this poem didn't do a whole lot for me... You're main problem is that your simply telling us ...

Was this poem perhaps inspired by this Robert Frost poem? I enjoyed this, but didn't completely understand it; Like Clau said, while I understood that this dealt with racial and/or ...

This was really original and well-written, and says a lot about our obsessive desire to always be the best, even if it's only something as trivial as swinging. I also ...

Yeah, this is sweet, and nice job with the rhyme, But like Clau said, it's too cliché and predictable to really make me feel, and it's vital that poetry arouses ...

Whoa... I just realized that this is an acrostic. *cough ditz cough* Hmm... Not especially memorable or powerful, but I enjoyed it; sweet and simple, and I can definitely relate. ...

Slightly suggestive, yes... :wink: Lovely, though. Flows nicely, gorgeous imagery and a fresh, original theme. My only suggestion is that you put the musical words, con fuoco, piu, etc., in ...

Hmm... I feel like it's not really fair for me to critique this with the same expectations I'd have for any other poem, because English is your second language, which ...