Firestalker

Hello Star-queen, that is what your screen name means right? First the technical reviewing. Cela ran far past the small city. Her hood flew down, her cloak flapped behind her ...

Chapter two? Lets see if it surpasses chapter one. Artemis Fowl looked at his safe miserably. He had been, for one of the first times in his life, [s]he had ...

Yay a Artemis Fowl Fan!!!! I see that averianmariej has already pointed out the mistakes that you have made but i see no improvements. Also your chapter is well... short, ...

A slow and calm gust of wind rustled the leaves of a lemon tree outside a window. Nimsi Whitewood stood at the open window, gazing out at the rustling lemon ...

Hey there Maki-Chan i agree about the drawings by the way, here's the grammar and punctuation . Four more of the warriors ran towards him. taking a stance, he held ...

Okay here goes. Part 1 of my crit Take a look at your perfect world! What would you do if it crumble into pieces because of what you just found ...

Hey myfreindsavamp, you posted in the 'Post your work here' Topic so i though of Critting it. Her eyes opened a crack as she heard the familiar scraping of the ...

Wow now that's an improvement. Much better. There are no mistakes that i could find but there still maybe some small ones. The story deepens and we all get to ...

Yeah well we all as writers ourselves have to respect other writers work. Even the Inheritance series, although it's a total copy of Star Wars and LOTR. :sigh: I really ...

I was drawn in after the very first book, Merchant of Death. I have recently read Raven Rise, D.J. McHale's latest realease. It let me with my jaw touching the ...

Hmm yes i read that plot summary too. And the problem is it didn't say anything of Eragon meeting a god did it?? But anyway i liked the first book ...

:shock: I am not much of a poetic person but this poem almost me me cry. Such talent you posses. Such talent you use. I wish i could write poems ...

:Sigh: Almost wanted it to continue but when i came to the end i guessed it was a short story that end here, where it had started. If i am ...

Stifling his shout of relief, Rhys left his hiding place and ran [s]foward[/s]. forward Glaring at the shadow, defiance sparked in Rhys' eyes. "I may have lost this round but ...

The flame spluttered and spat. Elias, King of Melosica, knew it wouldn't last long. In his hands he cradled his sword. He heard the sound of running feet, coming down ...