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For a prologue this is well done but i would suggest to improve your descriptions. 1) I don't know your main idea so i suggest that the first part would ...

Ha ha. Good point there with the soft and warm bed! Its a very nice little story. It gives me that feeling that you wrote it when you were half-asleep ...

Great idea! It a bitter-sweet feeling there that i like. I actually like the poem because it dosent have rhyme... The sand story of the ending of life. the violent ...

OK nice idea not saying anything about that, but indeed nothing is perfect as piepiemann22 said. Try avoiding repeating the same words in a big sentence as "each other - ...

I like it. The rhymes are fit. Overall its a nice poem. One problem ... This poem will fit a fantasy book when the main character is laying down on ...

Ok. Here is what i think you should do. 1)- I would suggest you describe Andrea more. How she moved, why she was a super hero. Skinny - Eh she ...

Great! Your idea is very well "explained" if i may say so. I mean - you said everything that is to say about the feeling on that battleground and about ...